Package 5-4: Writing

In these lessons your child will learn to write sentences with greater details based on the book ‘There’s a Sea in my Bedroom’ by Margaret Wild.

Week 6 - Package 4 - Year 1 & 2 English/literacy - Modelled writing

Things your child will need

Have these things available so your child can complete this task.

Ideal

Back up

  • A copy of the book: There’s a Sea in my Bedroom by Margaret Wild and published by Penguin Australia. You may be able to find a reading of this book on a digital sharing platform, such as YouTube.
  • Paper

Before your child starts

These lessons relate to the book ‘There’s a Sea in my Bedroom’ by Margaret Wild.

Make sure your child has everything ready at the start of the lesson. There are three modelled writing videos to work through this week. Check that the videos are working and that the volume is turned up for each lesson. It will help if your child is in a quiet environment.

Print the activity sheets to support your child as they write this week. They will need activity sheets 1a and 1b for the first lesson, activity sheets 2a and 2b for the second lesson, and activity sheets 3a and 3b for the third lesson.

What your child needs to do

Your child is learning to write sentences with greater details based on the book ‘There’s a Sea in my Bedroom’ by Margaret Wild. To do this, they will be focusing on using adjectives building noun groups. They will be encouraged to write using images as prompts or their own environment and life.

It is important your child engages with a range of texts, including imaginative, persuasive and informative. These lessons will help your child to use new vocabulary and to understand how authors make their writing more interesting and descriptive by adding detail.

What your child can do next

Your child will need to watch and listen to each video carefully, just like they do when the teacher at school is writing with them. During the video, you may like to pause it when your child is asked to respond to prompts and questions. Encourage your child to do this aloud so you can hear what they are thinking and check for understanding. Discussion encourages your child to think through the writing process.

Day 1 – watch Lesson 1. Follow the teacher on the video with Activity sheet 1a. Complete the planning and writing for Activity sheet 1b.

Day 3 – watch Lesson 2. Follow the teacher on the video with Activity sheet 2a. Complete the planning and writing for Activity sheet 2b.

Day 5 – watch Lesson 3. Follow the teacher on the video with Activity sheet 3a. Complete the planning and writing for Activity sheet 3b

Options for your child

Activity too hard?

You might like to ask your child what words and sentences they would like to write. You could take turns writing, encouraging your child to find the words. Shorter sentences are easier, so you might ask them to write one noun and one example of an adjective or noun group.

Activity too easy?

You might like to encourage your child to write more than two sentences, or to write a complete text with their two sentences in it.

Extension/additional activity

Your child might like to:

  • look at other picture books and identify examples of nouns, adjectives and noun groups in the stories
  • try creating more noun pyramids for a variety of subjects
  • publish their writing by writing it neatly on a new piece of paper or by typing it using a device
  • illustrate their writing after they finish. If they watched the shared reading videos this week, they might think about what camera shots and perspectives their pictures are drawn in.
  • read other pieces of text that they have written to see if they have used, or could add, some adjectives or noun groups.

Activity sheet 1a: adjectives

Learning intention

We’re learning to add details to our writing.

Success criteria

I can use adjectives to add more detail to my writing.

Nouns are naming words for a person, place or thing.

Adjectives are words that describe nouns.

Your task

With the teacher

Underline the nouns in these sentences from There’s a Sea in my Bedroom by Margaret Wild. Circle the adjectives.

Then he heard the sea.

It was soft and growly and friendly.

Your writing:

Write a descriptive sentence about a person, place or thing, using adjectives.

Ideas for writing

Activity sheet 1b: adjectives

Planning

Writing – noun pyramid

  • Noun
  • Adjective
  • 2 adjectives
  • 3 adjectives

Writing – final sentence

Turn your noun pyramid into a sentence like this one from There’s a Sea in my Bedroom by Margaret Wild:

It was such a friendly sea, all soft and growly.

Activity sheet 2a: noun groups

Learning intention

We’re learning to add details to our writing.

Success criteria

I can create noun groups to add more detail to my writing.

Nouns are naming words for a person, place or thing.

A noun group is a group of words that contains the noun and words to describe the noun.

Your task

With the teacher

Underline the nouns in these sentences from There’s a Sea in my Bedroom by Margaret Wild. Circle details that describe the nouns. Underline the noun groups.

But David knew there had been a sea in his bedroom.

There was even a small pile of sand underneath his chair.

Your writing:

Imagine your bedroom was another place or an exciting event happened in it. Write a couple of sentences to describe something that was left behind by building a noun group.

Ideas for writing

Activity sheet 2b: noun groups

Planning


Writing – build a noun group

  • Place or event
  • Noun
  • Adjective
  • Phrase
  • Positional words:

in across on under over next to beside on top underneath

Writing – final sentence

Turn your noun pyramid into a sentence like this one from There’s a Sea in my Bedroom by Margaret Wild:

But David knew there had been a sea in his bedroom. There was even a small pile of sand underneath his chair.

Activity sheet 3a: adding description

Learning intention

We’re learning to add details to our writing.

Success criteria

I can create noun groups to add more detail to my writing.

Nouns are naming words for a person, place or thing.

A noun group is a group of words that contains the noun and words to describe the noun.

Your task

With the teacher

Underline the nouns in these sentences from There’s a Sea in my Bedroom by Margaret Wild. Circle details that describe the nouns. Underline the noun groups.

But he liked collecting shells.

He had fan-shaped ones, some that looked like trumpets

and some that looked like curved animals' teeth.

Your writing:

Think about exploring your country, where you live. Write a couple of basic sentences about it. Then edit your sentences to add more description, by building noun groups.

Ideas for writing

Activity sheet 3b: adding description

Planning

Example from There’s a Sea in my Bedroom by Margaret Wild:

But he liked collecting shells. He had fan-shaped ones, some that looked like trumpets and some that looked like curved animals' teeth.

The sentences without details:

But he liked collecting shells. He had shells, shells and shells.

Writing – sentences with added description

Add detail to your sentences.

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